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PostSubject: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 7:05 am

Okay, so, the inspiration for this is from the amazing Alanis Morissette and a song by her called "Hands Clean". It's a Yakari [I believe that's what it's called] and it's gonna be pretty fun to write. Basically, Kari is the photographer for a photo shoot that Matt's band is doing, and blah blah blah, they eventually have an affair. Fun, right? I know. [not a lemon!] Here's the first paragraph:

Milliseconds? Lifetimes? It was all the same when she was in the presence of Matt Ishida, the numbing ecstasy of everything that went on between them behind closed doors, a blissfully burning chill that infected her like some sort of euphoric virus. He was definitely some sort of parasite, and she was undoubtedly his host, vulnerably succumbing to his will and every whimsical desire he had in his brain. In every kiss they traded, lightening pulsed through them with an electricity powerful enough to send a spark through even rubber. In every shaky, mingled breath they shared after their taboo act of pleasure-saturated sin, comfort swayed between them contently, either lulling them both into a slumber that neither of the two wanted to wake up from, or forcing an untimely rush to frantically put a bodybag over their evidence of adultery.


Soooo... Is it good? Or should I just trash it?
Comments, questions, suggestions, burning at the stake? I'm open to anything and everything.

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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 11:56 am

It's AWESOME!

That sounds great, I really can't wait to read it... It's so hard to find well written Yakari's!
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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 3:00 pm

I like it Very Happy
You've got good imagery going on here.
(I think that's the English word I mean)

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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 3:04 pm

Sounds about right to me

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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 5:34 pm

Wooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooot!

Finally, a refreshing Yakari with teh smex~~!

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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sat Nov 15, 2008 10:22 pm

Haha, sounds AWESOME.

If you trash this, I will smack you with an electric fly swatter... Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Mon Nov 17, 2008 1:40 am

Hehe, thankies you guys!
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PostSubject: Re: Hands Clean   Sun Jun 07, 2009 10:52 pm

Sounds interesting! Granted, I've never actually read a Yakari because honestly I'm an avid Takari fan, but it really does sound interesting!

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